Sunday, February 24, 2008

Glossing

I think my main issue right now is that I'm taking to much of a stance right off to one side. I think i should provide the reader with more facts and pros and cons from both sides, and also give the reader statistical information that my personal stance. Also there is alot of repetition that i use throughout my essay by using words or sentences that say " humanoid" robots in it. I think i can find another term for these robots maybe droids? I also feel that i can incorporate more personal experiences or examples in my paragraphs to provide structure and stability. The essay flows together well, but some sentence or paragraph arrangements can be done. The themes in my essay are pretty consistent, and the essay ultimately revolves around my topic, i think also i could include some more quotes or paraphrasing. Overall the essay is stable with consistent themes, but could also use some work and revision to make it a better overall research essay.

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